Hum musafir hoke chal rahe the,
Ki raaste mein kaate aa gaye,
Un kaaton ko dekh kar,
Humne raah badaldi,
Aur laga ki kisine apni nazar pher li,
Un sukhe Patton ko dekh kar,
Yun laga ki kuch kehna hai baaki,
Jaise unka sar hume dekhte hi neeche jhuki..
Woh majburi mein humse nazar nahi mila paaye,
Yun khud ko katte hue dekh kar himmat bhi juta nahi paye,
Aakhir kehte hi kya jab zubaan hi nahi,
Yeh hai har vriksh ki kahani..
Meaning of your ( very expressive ) poem would come through better if it was in HINDI script / words
As far as the following write-up is concerned, I suggest :
Ø Smaller paragraphs of 2 / 3 sentences
Ø Greater attention to spellings / grammar / syntax
Ø Highlighted words / phrases, could be rewritten for better grasp
Ø Words marked RED , could be dropped
Regards,
Hemen uncle
We often see trees getting cut, destroyed for man made purposes, what does a common man have to do with this? Right?
Ofcourse we have a duty to play and thank the environment for all the fruits and vegetables and goodies it gives us for free. Even our breathing is only possible through the trees.
We humans do not value what comes in free, and so today we are paying heaps of money just to breathe! Interesting isn't it?
What we had in the past and what we could truly cherish, it was all unvalued and not appreciated. And in return what did we do? We destroyed the mankind. It felt like a person digging his own grave.
So, to get an awareness we should work towards better greenery and more greenery than buildings. Remember this investment of planting trees around us is going to be gold in our lives. Imagine,
How would it feel if tomorrow we don't have even one tree or animal and everything is barren and remote around us or only building and infrastructure. How would it feel?
Forget about feeling, what amount of people dying today because of the virus will die tomorrow because of no oxygen! Is building something so important that it could cost your life? [ Rewrite entire sentence . Does not make sense as it stands ]
People reading this might say that only one building doesn't make a difference, but in place of one building we could plant 10 trees... Isn't it? The building will one day become old but the trees will still be alive for years to come. Mind you, trees live more than today's posh buildings.
An example for all,
In a village, called Piplantri in Rajasthan there are people who plant 111 trees on a girl child being born. It is an amazing gesture taken not only for girls but towards mankind as well. They all are farmers- uneducated yet high on their morales.
In short, to take care of your environment you do not need to be educated but you need to be loving towards what gives you a source to live better.
Save the Environment, Save Yourself !
Thank You
Team Pinnacle15
From: Jeel Mehta [mailto:mehtajeel615@gmail.com
Sent: Thursday, August 20, 2020 1:09 AM
To: Hemen Parekh
Subject: My new Post on Environment
Hello uncle please read my new post on environment
Awaiting your reviews on it. You may message me on Messenger as well no problem.
Below is the link..
Thank You!
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